This is really wonderful. You've nailed Lane's voice perfectly. My favorite section is undoubtedly the one where Joan notices his bruise and the wonderful, awkward tension that follows the make-up application. (I was sure that was where 'Signal 30' was headed initially, until it turned out to be an ice bucket she was carrying, not a make-up kit.) Echoing the other requests for a follow-up from Joan's POV - would love to see your take on it!